User blog comment:Nobody700/Chapter 746 Prediction/@comment-1595565-20140503004802

It was okay, and had the potential to actually be really good, but was suppressed by questionable plot devices and mechanical errors. First off, it's Admiral Fujitora, not Admiral Issho. The whole scene with Bastille was forced to say the least. You made him go from 0-60 without immediate provocation. The road they fell through was built on solid bedrock. Even if there's an underground section, it doesn't affect the structure enough for your idea to work. The whole part with Burgess didn't seem genuine either. So he's suddenly going from recon to kidnapping? If Robin knew fishman karate, as you are implying, why did she not use it already? Robin's ability makes it so each sprouted limb has the same physical capabilities as her own body, meaning it would take more than just her to hold down Burgess. The bit with Pica and Doflamingo, while thoughtful, overlooked a major element. Slaves aren't the only people at a world noble's beck and call. As we saw in Sabaody, they also have paid servants. Did it not occur to you that Doflamingo's subordinates could also have been in that line of service as well? Employing former slaves yet running a human auction house seems too contradictory for Doflamingo's character. Law's bit about the bird cage getting more walls makes no sense. Bird cages are static, unless you were trying to make it akin to the canary in a coal mine expression, in which case you botched it. The ending was good, though not enough to save the rest of it. All in all I get the sense you hurried to get this out. A fine example of how haste makes waste. Knowing how well you respond to pinpointed criticism, you will probably just shrug this off in an ostentacious manner, or begin to and then say you are only kidding. If anything does get through, let it be that you should put more time and thoughtful effort into your work. It has the potential to be good, but not if you're going to hurry through making it.