User blog comment:KuroAshi98/BW - Cook vs. King!? A What If Encounter On The Alabastian Plains!!/@comment-1595565-20120606223856

6/10. While an interesting fight, breaking the fourth wall with the narrator detracted from the overall impact. Also the narrator narrating all of Sanji's moves is a tad off-base. Narrations like that are simply meant to help the reader visualize what is happening. Imagine a narrator like that narrating a fight in the anime. You'd tell him to shut up. It was a good fight, I liked the matchup, and you had the right idea, but you're lacking in progression mechanics.