Forum:Feedback about my writing

Sorry, I am not sure if this is the right section to post this. I want to start destubbing chapter pages, but I first want to make sure that my writing is not so bad that I will waste my and everyone else's time. Please take a look at Chapter 88 and Chapter 487, 2 random chapters that I already did. User:Montblanc Noland told me that this kind of style is good, and exactly what this wikia needs on chapter/episode pages (as he said on my talk page). Can someone review these 2 pages and give me some feedback? Are they done well? Or do you have some suggestions to improve my style?

Baron Bones Brook (talk) 06:18, December 4, 2017 (UTC)