User blog comment:Uknownada/Nada's Search (fanfic) Prologue Part 1/@comment-4754162-20120524080858

Alternate re-telling of the story from a different point of view, kinda reminded me of DBV which Soul-kun recommended.

Its refreshing only if you can juice up the story-telling with something new and interesting, otherwise readers may easily get bored and lose interest because they already know the main version of the story from Oda's manga (and anime). Its no easy task but given enough creativity and innovative, you may be able to pull it off.

For now, based on what I read above, its lacking a fresh content over the main storyline. A good attempt, but not good enough (yet) to generate enthusiastic interest either.

That's my opinion as a reader, my apology in advance if you find this demotivating / offensive.