Forum:Feedback about my writing

Sorry, I am not sure if this is the right section to post this. I want to start destubbing chapter pages, but I first want to make sure that my writing is not so bad that I will waste my and everyone else's time. Please take a look at Chapter 88 and Chapter 487, 2 random chapters that I already did. User:Montblanc Noland told me that this kind of style is good, and exactly what this wikia needs on chapter/episode pages (as he said on my talk page). Can someone review these 2 pages and give me some feedback? Are they done well? Or do you have some suggestions to improve my style?

Baron Bones Brook (talk) 06:18, December 4, 2017 (UTC)

Hey Alex. I know you already got my feedback before, but stubs are my specialty. My only comment on these summaries is that you say that characters "start" or "begin" to do things instead of just saying that they do them. In some cases, like "Chew begins to get up," this makes sense; Chew tried to get up but was unsuccessful. Other times, it impedes the flow of the sentence. Does Usopp start to shout, or does he shout? Do you get what I mean? If not, I'd be happy to go over stuff more. So far though, this is looking great. I'll let some of the other editors know about this forum so they can give you their feedback. 08:36, December 4, 2017 (UTC)

Yeah I understand. That is more of a grammar issue. Thanks for the feedback anyway, but I was more concerned that the "long summaries" are too long. Since you didn't mention it, I take it that the length is good.

If anyone else has any other feedback, regarding anything I wrote, I will be glad to hear it.

Baron Bones Brook (talk) 09:02, December 4, 2017 (UTC)